Week 10 Story: The Starlit Lovers


     Once upon a time, there was a young woman who lived near a forest. Every week, she would go into the forest to pick a special purple fruit for her table. Once night, as she was about to head home, she looked up to the night sky and noticed that it was full of stars. As she looked a little while longer, she seemed to notice that one star was a bit brighter than the other, and maybe even closer to Earth. 
     She thought it might just be a planet, as sometimes they were visible from Earth. She continued home and fell asleep wondering if that star was indeed a planet, or maybe something more. She dreamed of the star, and in her dream, the star turned into a handsome young man. The mans eyes were as brilliant as the star itself, and she soon fell in love. When she woke up the next morning, she decided that she needed to go back to the forest and examine the star again. So, she waited until mid afternoon and headed to the forest.
     Not too long after she arrived in the forest, she began to see the stars appearing in the sky. She sat and watched until the brightest star reappeared in the same spot it had been in the night before. She noticed that the star seemed to almost be winking at her, and she wished in her mind that the star would, in fact, be the man from her dream. A few seconds after making her wish, she heard a voice coming from nowhere. The voice said that as long as she was living on Earth, he would not be able to join her, and that she would not be able to join him in the sky. She began to cry and walked home.
     She lay in bed that night, wondering if there was anything she would be able to do to bring her and her love together. She stayed awake the entire night, thinking of things that might work. Eventually, she decided that her life was no longer worth living here on Earth, and began to plan out her own death. Later that day, she met an old witch, and asked her if she knew of any way to die. The witch refused to give her the information she desired, but instead, offered a new idea. The witch offered to turn her into a star, and the young girl was elated. She immediately took the offer, and prepared herself for the magic that was about to transform her.
     As night began to fall, the bright star reappeared, looking for his love down on Earth. He began to grow worried as he could not seem to find her. Right as he was about to give up, he noticed a brighter light shining beside him. He looked over and saw the love of his life, no longer on Earth as a human, but in the sky as a beautiful star. Together they continue to light up the night sky every night, and can sometimes be seen in constellations, holding hands and looking into each other's eyes. The end.


Authors Note: My story is based off of a story titled "A Maiden Who Loved a Star" from a book titled  "When the Storm God Rides: Tejas and Other Indian Legends" written by the Tejas Indians from the early 20th century. In the original version, a young maiden goes out to pick purple fruit and notices a star that it shining brighter than the others and seems to be closer to Earth than the other stars. She goes back every night to see the star and dreams about it becoming a man. She learns that the two can never be together if he is in the sky and she is on Earth. She then asks a witch how to die so she can be with her lover, but is instead turned into a tree, where the sky man reaches out and touches her in her new form. As he touches her, he turns to dust and falls all over the tree. The dust then turns into purple flowers that grow on the tree, and the two spent the rest of forever together. My story is very similar, except that instead of turning into a tree, the main character turns into a star and the two lovers are seen in constellations instead of purple plants. 

Comments

  1. Hi Ashlyn. I liked your story a lot. It was starting to get kind of depressing thinking about the two being separated and then the woman wanting to kill herself. I am glad she found a way to be with the love of her life without taking her own life. It ended up being a happy ending. I also had never read the original story so I am glad you included a good author's note. Well done.

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  2. Hey Ashlyn! I really liked that she was able to be with the star in the end and it wasn't a sad story that ended with them apart. The dream also must have been interesting, I wonder if the star talked to her there and influenced how it turned out. Thankfully the witch was kind instead of tricking her! I was afraid that would be the result when she was brought into the story. Nice work on the story.

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  3. Hey Ashlyn! I hadn't heard this story before and liked your presentation of it! The idea of two lovers being separated by circumstance seems to be a pretty common one, and this was in interesting variation of that. I also liked that instead of having them join on Earth, you've placed them into the sky and mentioned that they're eternal that way. Overall, good work!

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  4. Hi Ashlyn!
    I enjoyed your story, it reminded me of the stars in Disney movies. The second star to the right (Peter Pan), Evangeline (the Princess and the Frog), and the Wishing Star (Pinocchio). I liked how you stuck pretty close to the original story but changed the ending to a happier one where they ended up together. The only thing I would add to your story is just giving the characters names. One grammar thing I noticed was "Once night, as she was..." I feel like Once should be One.

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  5. Hi Ashlyn! I didn't read the original story, so the author's note helped me follow along. I liked your rendition of it. It was creative and romantic. It was almost a shorter, sweeter take on Romeo and Juliet. I liked how you gave them a sweet ending and put them in the sky together. Overall, I really enjoyed your story!

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  6. Hey Ashlyn! I'm not really one for romances but this was really well written! I think you did a great job adding detail that allowed the reader to form more vivid images in their head. Being more descriptive is something I'm working on myself and I was able to pick up a few ideas here, so thank you. After reading the author's note, your version of the story does a good job of drawing parallels to the original in a way that we can see their relationship but know that yours is very personalized, great writing!

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